'On the Run' pitch improvements

Improvements all written in grey.


Narrative


Equilibrium: Aidan is at his father's funeral, with Ethan and Lily. They are all reasonably wealthy, good looking upper middle class people.


Disruption: Elijah tells them that Aidan's father was killed and did not die. After some looking into it, Aidan finds out something more mysterious. They return home to find a mysterious man at their home, rooting through things crazily. He finds a letter and throws it onto the fire, as Aiden, Ethan and Lily make themselves known. After a short fight scene, the assailant is unconscious and the trio attempt to get the would be assailant away. However, they are seen and reported to the police. Aidan, Ethan and Lily shoot up most wanted lists on suspicion of attempted murder. Newly promoted police sergeant Jason Barnes is keen to get them to make his first big catch. On the run from the police, they still attempt to find out more about why they were attacked and the death, and uncover the truth. Aidan's father formerly worked with Victor Cooper, a high profile businessman, and was close to revealing secrets of his shady criminal other life.

Restoration: In a chase scene, Aidan, Ethan and Lily catch Victor and he admits the truth, before escaping. However, with the police on their tails, the trio try to escape, but Ethan is caught by Barnes and is arrested. At some point, Aidan and Lily share a kiss, before Ethan is taken away. Ethan is put in jail but Victor escapes.

Resolution: Ethan is in jail, during visting time. He is visited by Lily and Aidan, who merely say 'We're getting you out' Lead on to possible sequel.


Characters


Hero: Aidan Butler - Played by Henry Cavill, this character has recently lost his father, once a master criminal, in mysterious circumstances. He wants to find out what happened to him.
Helper/Hero: Ethan Parker - Played by Andre Holland, he is one of Aidan's best friends. He advises Aidan to be a cautious, but is not as strong willed. Very technically gifted.
Princess/Hero: Lily Swan - Played by Mary Elizabeth Winstead, she is the other of Aidan's best friends.
Donor: Elijah Carson - Played by Chiwetel Ejiofor, he first informs the trio that the death was not normal. Helps with little extra bits of information throughout. Mysterious
Villain: Kevin Cooper/Victor Cooper - Played by Christian Bale, this evil mastermind is the one behind the death of Aidan's father.